Reflection
I was very proud of this story because I felt that it showcased my more serious style, something that I had not done previously. It was also a blast to write because it required a lot of research beforehand, which I found interesting.
I could improve upon this story by making the lead a bit more interesting. Although it effectively draws the reader in as is, if I were to add more and elaborate the anecdote it would be much better.
Also the story contains a few awkward sentences that would need to be rewritten. For example, "But like cocaine and meth, alpha-PVP comes with a comedown, or the period in which the substance leaves the body which is followed by depression and fatigue which causes the user to take more to get rid of these feelings," this sentence is a little too long and would sound better if it were split into two different sentences like: "But like cocaine and meth, alpha-PVP comes with a comedown, or the period in which the substance leaves the body. During the comedown, the user can experience depression and fatigue, resulting in further use to avoid these feelings."
I could improve upon this story by making the lead a bit more interesting. Although it effectively draws the reader in as is, if I were to add more and elaborate the anecdote it would be much better.
Also the story contains a few awkward sentences that would need to be rewritten. For example, "But like cocaine and meth, alpha-PVP comes with a comedown, or the period in which the substance leaves the body which is followed by depression and fatigue which causes the user to take more to get rid of these feelings," this sentence is a little too long and would sound better if it were split into two different sentences like: "But like cocaine and meth, alpha-PVP comes with a comedown, or the period in which the substance leaves the body. During the comedown, the user can experience depression and fatigue, resulting in further use to avoid these feelings."